Revisions

Satellite
Tracked
Traced
Everywhere
I can find
I can see
I can feel
Who you are
What you do
I know
I know
No secrets
I am the satellite
I am untouchable
unapproachable
undefeatable
I am the satellite


Grass
Who glosses you every morning?
Are the elves there... painting your stalks?
Every morning you show the suspicious quality
Is there something that we dont know?
Are you more than just a plant?
What is your "dew"?
Unexplainable, this crazy phenomenon
How do you change every morning?
What creates this morning dew..that lies on you?

Taylor - two very nice poems.  I very much appreciate the metaphor in "Satellite."  I wonder if you could add more details (things you know about a satellite or could look up) to enrich this poem.
In Grass - I found the questions in this poem excellent questions to raise.  I think I would have liked some kind of conclusion or discussion rather than just raising the questions.  Your best line is your last line!

Satellite
Tracked
Traced
Everywhere
I can find
I can see
I can feel
The knowing of you
the detailed and enriched pictures
following your abilities
establishing a sense of companionship
all unknown to the follower.
Who you are, I know
What you do, I know
I know
I know
No secrets
I am the satellite
I am untouchable
unapproachable
undefeatable
I can see the things
all around you
hovering and waiting to pounce
I am the eyes behind your head
I am the satellite

Grass
Who glosses you every morning?
Are the elves there... painting your stalks?
Every morning you show the suspicious quality
Is there something that we dont know?
Are you more than just a plant?
What is your "dew"?
Unexplainable, this crazy phenomenon
How do you change every morning?
I know you answers are unreliable
because you could never tell the truth
your the liar of it all
Who knows?
Maybe the cold morning air creates this dew!
Nahh
Too predictable, never could happen
But I still question...
What creates this morning dew...that lies on you?

I found my poems to be much better after using Moriartys feedback. I feel like my poems are much more complete and able to draw the reader much deeper into the story. I added a lot of more detail and even a sub-story in just so it ables the reader to think and feel even more about the whole concept.